New poem...what do ya think?

That was a poor excuse for poetry. First, there are TONS of spelling errors- it goes way beyond typos. There are quite a few grammatical errors as well. Poetic license is one thing but you're supposed to use it to manipulate language for a reason. I liked SOME of what you did with the rhyme and your verbage- but most of it I've heard before- primarily in most of the poorly written poems that I see here on Yahoo Answers.